The death penalty has been around since America was founded and is still one of the most controversial topics in today’s society. No matter what side of the argument you are on though you have to admit that this is a really interesting topic. I love researching this topic and learning the history of such a gruesome thing as executions. There is heated debates on whether there still should be a death penalty or not and I happen to fall on the side that believes there should not be a death penalty. All people are equal as human beings on this earth so why should one human have the power to end another’s life? As the bible says, “You shall not murder” (Exodus 20:13). I personally believe in god and follow his laws so when the bible says that killing is wrong, I tend to agree with it. The Ten Commandments are the first written laws ever and the second law in the Ten Commandments is thou shall not kill. For those of you who do not believe in the bible there are many other reasons why there should not be the death penalty besides the fact that God says so. The effectiveness of the death penalty is extremely little. The reason that the death penalty is even in place is as a deterrent to crime. It was thought that if people knew that the crime they were going to commit is punishable by death, than they would think twice before they committed the crime. I personally do not think this works and neither do the police chiefs around the country. “A 2009 poll commissioned by DPIC found police chiefs ranked the death penalty last among ways to reduce violent crime. The police chiefs also considered the death penalty the least efficient use of taxpayers’ money.” (http://www.deathpenaltyinfo.org/FactSheet.pdf). Having had many conversations with correctional officers, I have learned that when people are faced with the death penalty, they are more likely to act violently and recklessly because they have nothing more to lose. If god, the police chiefs, and violent criminals with nothing to lose are not enough to convince you that the death penalty is wrong then I have some more work to do. My next post will be very interesting and I look forward to writing it. I hope you all enjoy reading this blog and come back to read my next post.
Works Cited:
"Facts About the Death Penalty." Death Penalty Information Center. N.p., 20 Sept. 2010. Web. 18 Nov. 2011. http://www.deathpenaltyinfo.org/FactSheet.pdf.
Bible Exodus 20:13
I really like this post because I never knew that when people commit a crime that is punishable by death then they would be even more violent, I thought it would be the other way around. Overall it's a good post because you have everything you need for a strong argument.
ReplyDeleteTopic Sentence: Your topic sentence feels like it needs more definition to it (i.e. it was kind of hard to pick it out from the introduction part of your post).
ReplyDeleteSupport: Try to add more support to your point of your argument. Whenever I read through your post, I feel like I'm not that convinced and it makes me want more supportive information in your topic points.
Transitions: Once you've added supportive material, combine it with some transitions, since it feels like your post jumps instantly from one topic to another without any deliberation on the previous topic.
Quote: Your first quote has some deliberation in it (just make sure to explain it) while it feels like you just stuck the second quote in the middle of the post without explanation. Remember to define the importance of your quotes.
Grammar and Spelling: There are some minor grammar and capitalization errors, but nothing that has a major impact on the post.
Argument: You have an argument going here, just be sure to back it up with support in order to create a stronger argument.
One thing that I did like about the post was how you tied in the bible and religion against the death penalty for your side of the argument.
It's another big block of text which you need to seperate the text into smaller chunks.
ReplyDeleteYou do a good jobs stating your morals with the Ten Commandments. I can't really say anymore because I've run out of time to comment.